Just To Say, Only Greens

I snatched

Them greens

In the tip jar,

While you were

In the back.

 

Didn’t know

What you

Was gonna

Do with it.

Probably

Some fancy

Family meal out.

 

I know,

Old man.

You run the store

Late at night,

Going home later

To your family

Who are all

Sleeping.

 

You were alone,

The only employee

On the gas station

Night shift.

But, I needed

That quick cash.

 

So sorry,

Pop. It was too

Tempting.

You have this job

For the money.

I’m just thinking

Of my own

Family.

 


Inspiration

https://www.poets.org/poetsorg/poem/just-say


⌊ © Serena Delgado (June, 2018) ⌉

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7 thoughts on “Just To Say, Only Greens

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      1. Oh, I really did! And to me, I heard a person who didn’t want to do wrong, but situations led him to do what he had to for his family. Even if it meant doing wrong.

        Why did you try something new? I know that may sound rude, but I’m honestly curious.

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      2. Yeah, it’s supposed to take from William Carlos Williams’ unapologetic apology poem, “This Is Just To Say.”

        I had to come up with something for a creative writing class, but the original draft was a bit vague in direction. I decided to revise and post it here, haha.

        However, I do want to look into more interesting styles of poetry and maybe use them as inspiration for a poem. I always tended to have fun doing that.

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      3. Alright, so I read that poem, and I honestly like yours more. I feel like there’s more feeling behind your words; your readers could take so many different lessons from it.

        I think you’re doing very well–and I hope you got wonderful feedback from your class, because it was A great piece of work! I’m glad you posted it.

        That’s so interesting. I actually do the same thing with fiction novels and short stories. I honestly have read little poetry, but my wife recently pushed me to read more of it. And I’m glad she did lol.

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      4. Oh, wow. That’s a huge compliment. Thank you so much.

        The original draft actually had the first two stanzas omitted from it. I got a good grade on it, but “meh” feedback. My professor wanted a clearer beginning to show the unapologetic apology (I didn’t get any positive feedback, basically).

        I’m not really into writing novels (it seems so time-consuming and difficult). I love short stories though and have a few published already. I personally think I’m better at short story writing than poetry, but I haven’t really focused on writing and posting them to my blog.

        I understand the not reading much poetry. I actually hadn’t gravitated to poetry much, but it can be very intricate and I’m trying to get better in writing it.

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      5. You’re very welcome. And that’s amazing. Congrats!
        I just have a couple pointless articles published. If I could publish one novel, I’d feel satisfied. I don’t know if I could ever write multiple, because of what you said.
        And yes, I feel similar ways about poetry.

        Have a great day! And thanks for the back and forth conversation. I enjoyed it. Oh, and nevermind that professor if his feedback didn’t come from a place to build you up.

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